I took this photo this morning at 8.30 am, the blue sky through the beauty of the tree captured my inspiration; but what was really stunning were the two birds of prey riding the thermals above.
Dreams
I reached out to touch your face,
My hand went through your skin
And then your image dissipates.
Like a reflection in the water
That’s broken by a pebble
The ripples go on forever
Like warm memories
Of lost lovers.
The morning
Chased my dream
Away and there you
Were still sleeping, I lent
Over to kiss your face, and
You smiled as you were waking.
The alarms shrilling ring-ring-ring
Was I really still dreaming; slowly,
Eyes opening; you were softly sleeping.
© Julian Clarke 2016
Pretty cool with the hourglass and the words you chose fit that form so well. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteHello Susan, thank you for dropping and leaving a few kind words, it is fun to try and match subject with form; very much appreciated.
DeleteVery clever use of word - in content and form.
ReplyDeleteThank you J Cosmo, experimentation with form can be fun, and at the same time challenging
DeleteVery nicely done with the shape and the tenor of the poem.
ReplyDeleteOne I very much enjoyed writing, thank you for your kind remarks Thotpurge.
Deletelove this dream chasing & the layout...
ReplyDeleteHi Sumana, isn't dream chasing a wonderfull way to try and capture poetry, and thank you for commenting, much appreciated
DeleteLovely form here :D very artistically done.
ReplyDeleteSanaa, thank you for passing by and leaving you kind thoughts here.
DeleteFrom dream time to reality, you capture the connection between lovers very well indeed.
ReplyDeleteHi Kerry, thank you for your kind comment.
DeleteThe hourglass form captures the dreamscape within reality or the other way around. Either way there is a sense of connection in both realms.
ReplyDeleteHello Truedessa, thank you for your kind comments, have a good week ahead.
DeleteThis is very lovely. A beautiful awakening.......
ReplyDeleteHi Sherry, thanks for dropping by and leaving you kind remark.
DeleteI LOVE this:
ReplyDelete"I reached out to touch your face,
My hand went through your skin"
Hi p.s. thank you for droppiny by and leaving your comment, much appreciated
DeleteWhat an interesting dream! Written with such gentleness, Julian. I liked.
ReplyDeletehello humbird, thank you indeed for your warm comment. Love and Light
DeleteWhen one is with a loved one it is always a dream whether awakened or asleep! The best of moments certainly!
ReplyDeleteHank
Hank, very much appreciated. Peace and Light
Deletehow apt the shape of your poem - a sand timer and hence the anxiety in the dream of losing the loved one only to wake for now and be reassured
ReplyDeleteIn draft I found this lacked something, putting into to an hour glass form gave it the feel I was after. Thank you for your kind comment, tellaletherapy.
DeleteYou have lovely dreams.
ReplyDeleteRallentanda, thank you for dropping by, I appreciate your thoughts.
Deletethis is a lovely concrete poem. i loved how you paced the poem, the top half of the 'hourglass' is the dream and the lower half, the reality in the morning. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much dsnake1
DeleteBeautiful and well written.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Thank you ZQ
DeleteFine poem, Julian. I like the tree image and the introductory words. The notion of the circling predatory hawks above the pleasant scene links well to the anxiety in the dream.
ReplyDeleteHi Richard, thank you for the generosity of your words, and, as always they are very much appreciated and encouraging.
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