Saturday 30 July 2016

Dreams


I took this photo this morning at 8.30 am, the blue sky through the beauty of the tree captured my inspiration; but what was really stunning were the two birds of prey riding the thermals above.


Dreams

I saw you in my dreams last night
I reached out to touch your face,
My hand went through your skin
And then your image dissipates.
Like a reflection in the water
That’s broken by a pebble
The ripples go on forever
Like warm memories
Of lost lovers.
The morning
Chased my dream
Away and there you
Were still sleeping, I lent
Over to kiss your face, and 
You smiled as you were waking.
The alarms shrilling ring-ring-ring
Was I really still dreaming; slowly,
Eyes opening; you were softly sleeping.

© Julian Clarke 2016

32 comments:

  1. Pretty cool with the hourglass and the words you chose fit that form so well. Nicely done!

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    1. Hello Susan, thank you for dropping and leaving a few kind words, it is fun to try and match subject with form; very much appreciated.

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  2. Very clever use of word - in content and form.

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    1. Thank you J Cosmo, experimentation with form can be fun, and at the same time challenging

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  3. Very nicely done with the shape and the tenor of the poem.

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    1. One I very much enjoyed writing, thank you for your kind remarks Thotpurge.

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  4. love this dream chasing & the layout...

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    1. Hi Sumana, isn't dream chasing a wonderfull way to try and capture poetry, and thank you for commenting, much appreciated

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  5. Lovely form here :D very artistically done.

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    1. Sanaa, thank you for passing by and leaving you kind thoughts here.

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  6. From dream time to reality, you capture the connection between lovers very well indeed.

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    1. Hi Kerry, thank you for your kind comment.

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  7. The hourglass form captures the dreamscape within reality or the other way around. Either way there is a sense of connection in both realms.

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    1. Hello Truedessa, thank you for your kind comments, have a good week ahead.

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  8. This is very lovely. A beautiful awakening.......

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    1. Hi Sherry, thanks for dropping by and leaving you kind remark.

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  9. I LOVE this:
    "I reached out to touch your face,
    My hand went through your skin"

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    1. Hi p.s. thank you for droppiny by and leaving your comment, much appreciated

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  10. What an interesting dream! Written with such gentleness, Julian. I liked.

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    1. hello humbird, thank you indeed for your warm comment. Love and Light

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  11. When one is with a loved one it is always a dream whether awakened or asleep! The best of moments certainly!

    Hank

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    1. Hank, very much appreciated. Peace and Light

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  12. how apt the shape of your poem - a sand timer and hence the anxiety in the dream of losing the loved one only to wake for now and be reassured

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    1. In draft I found this lacked something, putting into to an hour glass form gave it the feel I was after. Thank you for your kind comment, tellaletherapy.

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    1. Rallentanda, thank you for dropping by, I appreciate your thoughts.

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  14. this is a lovely concrete poem. i loved how you paced the poem, the top half of the 'hourglass' is the dream and the lower half, the reality in the morning. :)

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  15. Beautiful and well written.
    ZQ

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  16. Richard Fleming4 August 2016 at 21:04

    Fine poem, Julian. I like the tree image and the introductory words. The notion of the circling predatory hawks above the pleasant scene links well to the anxiety in the dream.

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    1. Hi Richard, thank you for the generosity of your words, and, as always they are very much appreciated and encouraging.

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